Haiku:
Turn the corner fast
Stare at your foe in the face
B.B.s pelt his chest
Tonka:
Legs pump, visor fogs
Look down your sights through the mist
See the corner there
Check your six then take a peak
Check the safe, then open fire
Bio-Poem
Hollow, changed, troubled
Almost husband of Lilly, brother of Patrick
Loved freedom, loved Lilly
He suffered great loss, immense fear, and tons of regret
Feared rejection, did not fear death, feared inadequacy
Who proved running away is useless and forgiveness is always around the bend
He wanted the best for someone, wanted to escape, he wanted to be adequate
Born and raised a Dublin boy
The haiku and tonka a really violent. But they were funny. I don’t really know what the deal is with your bio-poem but how do you feel about putting fiance of instead of almost husband of? The bio-poem was really interesting. I can’t wait to read the narrative.
your bio poem is good, and i don’t really get your tonka but it sounds good!
hey boy,
i liked em’, you did a good job describing things
i like the bio-poem alot to
i think the only thing u should do differently write about more different things