Turn the corner fast

Stare at your foe in the face

B.B.s pelt his chest



Legs pump, visor fogs

Look down your sights through the mist

See the corner there

Check your six then take a peak

Check the safe, then open fire




Hollow, changed, troubled

Almost husband of Lilly, brother of Patrick

Loved freedom, loved Lilly

He suffered great loss, immense fear, and tons of regret

Feared rejection, did not fear death, feared inadequacy

Who proved running away is useless and forgiveness is always around the bend

He wanted the best for someone, wanted to escape, he wanted to be adequate

Born and raised a Dublin boy

Published on March 11, 2009 at 5:48 pm  Comments (3)  

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  1. The haiku and tonka a really violent. But they were funny. I don’t really know what the deal is with your bio-poem but how do you feel about putting fiance of instead of almost husband of? The bio-poem was really interesting. I can’t wait to read the narrative.

  2. your bio poem is good, and i don’t really get your tonka but it sounds good! 🙂

  3. hey boy,
    i liked em’, you did a good job describing things
    i like the bio-poem alot to

    i think the only thing u should do differently write about more different things

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