The cold winter wind

Surrounds everything outside

Where are my mittens?



Fast hands and fast legs

Every hit filled with passion

And dedication

Without them I am useless

Without me they are useless




Fearful, Nice, Funny, Gullible

Son of Todd *******, brother of Ryan

Who loves 3oh!3, Milk, and running away

Who dislikes my dog, air soft guns, and small spaces

He fears ben *****, violence, and terror

Who successfully lived past age 14

Who wanted to be in a band very bad

Born in Alaska and living in *********


Published on March 11, 2009 at 5:45 pm  Comments (4)  

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  1. Very well done. I ecspecially liked the haiku. I think you could have used more visuals in your bio poem and less about how he runs away.

  2. The Haiku is corny, but it’s cute and I enjoyed it. The Tanka and Biopoem were both very good. You could try to make some words more elaborate. For example, you could say who desperately wanted to be in a band, instead of saying who wanted to be in a band very bad. It was very good though.

  3. The Haiku made me laugh out loud. I don’t know if that was the desired affect, but I liked it. On the Tanka, when you say ‘and dedication,’ for some reason that feels awkward or wrong to me. But I think it has a nice poetry flow to it. Good job!

  4. i have your mittens

    i liked them alot, especially the hiaku
    fill in the stars with made up names
    use more vivid words

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